Writing An Exemplary Essay

In reviewing the essay, there are many errors I noticed. Overall, your writing lacks focus in regards to ideas, grammar, and spelling. I am no expert in any of these areas, but my ability to produce a coherent essay is demonstrated by the fact that I am nearly done with college. The goal of my essay is to guide you towards a better way of writing based on my prior experiences. A good essay in my experience is one that has three major components: structure, depth, and voice.

Overall, the essay seemed to lack flow as a result of a noticeable absence of transition words. The essay had bad syntax. Each paragraph seemed to be scenario after scenario and each sentence seemed to be idea after idea. For example, in the first paragraph, the list consisted of multiple sentences, instead of just one sentence with commas. “But they are few: Being mistaken for a wheat field by a cloud of locusts. Being buried alive”...“Interviews from film festivals.”, this seemed like an awful way to list ideas. In addition, the fourth paragraph of the essay was made up of only 2 sentences, one

A typical high-school student struggles in learning new concepts, in AP Language & Composition many students learn new challenging concepts which make the class difficult.

For one, the cohesiveness that they achieved through the structure of their paragraph is something I greatly admire, so I would be sure to emulate that in my own paragraph. As previously stated, I would also make sure that the “how” in my paragraph is explicit and tie that seamlessly into the “why.” Additionally, I think it’s incredibly important to tie everything back to the purpose and expand beyond that. Expansion to society can greatly improve the score of an essay, but making the expansion relevant is imperative. In brief, I would take a lot of writing tips from the student examples and incorporate them into my own body

I feel like the body paragraphs are the strongest. I believe this because I feel like the details given help paint a picture. Also I spent the most time on. I think the weakest part in my essay are the introductory and conclusion paragraphs. I have always struggled with these and I am trying to get better. I know for sure that my thesis are never up to par. I did have some trouble in my body paragraphs I could not remember if when paraphrasing or summarizing you add () this and a page number, so I did it

To conclude this class, I am submitting the two essays I feel most exemplify my ability to write precisely and purposefully while still using and refuting arguments: essay three, as required, and essay four.

7) Did you notice anything about the way in which this essay was written that seems to contradict essay “rules” you have been taught in the past? If so, explain

Lastly, self-evaluation is a key component to writing an effective essay. Even though I was able to have student feedback for my essays; self-evaluation is important for me to be able to determine my strengths and weaknesses in my writing. After composing each essay I was required to compose a self-evaluation. The evaluations describe what I consider the strong points in the essay, and were I felt I still needed to

When you finish, reread the essay to check for all of the points above, and then proofread it to be sure your work does not contain errors in grammar or spelling.

(Note: Grading criteria for Part B and C: You may write and structure your essay any way you’d like, but it should be in narrative form (not simply listing). An excellent essay is one that presents a clearly written, well-organized, thoughtful discussion of the given question, follows the

Organization: Your essay is well organized for the most part, but there are a few areas you could improve upon. For instance, your paragraphs don't appear to include any transitions between one another, which could easily improve the flow of your essay. Next, your body paragraphs should be more connected to the thesis of the essay.

After the first draft, one of the most important areas that I needed to improve was the analysis and finding better evidences for my point that I have made in my essay. The reason I had to go through struggle finding evidences in my first draft was because my thesis was not clear which made it hard to show my point in it. After the first draft, I was able to find some convenient sources that are related to my topic which helped me to support my point and made me have a better analysis on those points. However, I believe my analysis is somewhat effective as it should be according to the rubric after my final draft has been done, but there are still some places in the essay where I feel like it can still be improved. I tried my best to improve it as best as I can to make it clear to the audience by expanding more on it by giving more detailed about the points that I have made in the essay. However, I definitely learned how making my analysis more specific helped me a lot to make my essay clearer than being vague and general. After reviewing my Rhetorical Analysis, I definitely learned how doing a better research on my topic makes my argument

An aspect that I often struggle with is proper punctuation. Truthfully, I do not know how to correctly use punctuation. When writing, I place punctuation by mimicking authors’ formats or by placing them where it feels right. This is present in all of my writing, but I am attempting to improve. Punctuation also plays a part in another weakness of mine, one that is most likely present within this essay. Since middle school, it was engrained in my mind that a good essay is a long essay, so I have a tendency for wordiness. To elongate an essay, I tend to add needless words and sentences. For example, in the rough draft of the Whole Process Essay, I added several unrelated occurrences to elongate the paragraphs. Although my essays were long and wordy, the professor commented on vagueness and unclearness within the whole process and practice essay. Sometimes, I disregard the fact that the reader might not know what it is I am writing about or the sentence makes perfect sense to me. The latter is the most common, I quickly read the sentence and it appears fine to me. Within the Whole Process Essay, another weakness was brought to my attention. I lack structure, a key element in effective writing. Within the same essay and a few others, I simply added what felt right, sometimes the result would be acceptable but in other instances, it was a long, jumbled mess.

1.What prewriting assignment(s) did you choose for this? Why? How well did they work for you?

To become a success in life, we all need to learn to become a good student in every aspect of life. Becoming a good student takes much work and self-discipline. There are many ways that a student can stand out from the rest of the class. These good students are distinguished by their attitude, intellectual skills, consciousness, and achievement.